gangnam style

Clues to the meaning of gangnam style:
Nice wealthy suits. Horse stable, private jets, rich, nice cars, dancing girls, people standing on top of others like riding a horse. Sexy ladies is only english word.

There are horses that are living and on a carosel. He was at a country club, in his private jet, on a bus and in an elavator. In Gangnam. He was in a hottub and in the bathroom.

Korean pop music. Place in Korea with 95% of the wealth. Making fun of rich people there.

post secret

My post secret postcard is of multiple animas such as a dog, cat, panda bear, beta fish and goldfish and it reads "I think I love animals more than people." It is a collage of all the animals pasted together and the words are wrtitten in in blue marker. The audience for this postcard is other animal lovers like myslef. It is for people who would rather be around animals than obnoxious humans who are full of problems. Animals give unconditional love and they are funny and sweet. They snuggle with you at night, play with you durring the day and are always there when you come home from a long day at school or work. They can bring happiness to anyones day and are always positive. My design appeals to the heart because it is heartwarming. I changed my design from wanting it to be of all cats to all animals because I could not find enough cat pictures in my magazine. Oh well, I am an avid animal lover and this will work for me. My secret is revealed.

peer review for paper 3

Today for my peer review I had Sam review and critique my paper. My paper is an anti-ad for the ford auto industry. Ive taken an image of a Ford F150 truck and added text to expose Ford for their auto bailout and the burdon it has put on us taxpayers. The point is that their bailout is costing us money and most people dont even realize it. My spoof ad reads "It's Simple. You buy our cars. Or you'll pay for them anyways." In my paper I have spent time analyzing my add, talking about my spoof ad and exposing the industry as a whole. According to my peer review partener my paper is straight forward and to the point. All I have to do is ad intext citations to support the claims and facts I have presented. I have two outside sources for my paper so now I realize I must cite them intext and include them at the end as well. Also For the last 2 pages of my paper I am going to focus on writing more about my spoof ad and why I made the choices I did in spoofing it from the original. My favorite and most helpfull peer review technique has been the drafting and talking with my peers about my paper. I cant stress enough how much I LOVE the idea of making multiple drafts becuase it really breaks up the assignment and makes it so much easier for me to write. Also talking with my peers really give me great insight and ideas for my paper.

November 9th class blog

To start off this wonderful Friday afternoon on November 9th the class saw our last ad pitch for our paper ideas. That completed the ad pitchs for the week so everyone had their correct and final ideas for their paper. Next we transitioned into our peer reviews. We were asked to step into Ms. Lang's shoes for this peer review. We were instructed to respond from our point of view as a reader and to write a quick note at the end on what we liked about the paper, what we wanted to change about the paper and any grey areas. Once we had our partner we read eachothers papers and underlined what we liked or thought was confusing. We wrote our general notes on the back and disscussed how the paper flowed.
After a thorough disscussion with our partner we hopped on our blog to write about our peer review. We were instructed to write about which peer review technique was the most helpful to us? Examples being our ad pitch, peer review, rough draft or meeting with Ms. Lang. We also had to write about our paper and how we are going to continue drafting it to get it to its final form. Then sign up sheet was passed around with dates to meet one-on-one with Ms. Lang next week. The options are Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday or Friday. I suggest asking her for the sign up sheet on Wednesday when we meet again so you can get that extra help with your paper. It never hurts to directly speak with the source that is determining your grade on an assignment.
So after we finished and published our blog class was over and we were dismissed. An overall easy day and not something that we are not used to because this is in fact our third paper. Also we had to turn in a copy of our draft to Ms. Lang so if you skipped class today to get started early on your 3 day weekend remember to turn in a printed draft on Wednesday. Lastly our homework is to read "Just Walk On By" page 192-195 in our On Writing textbook. This homework is due Wednesday so be prepared to discuss this reading in class.
Thank you all for reading and enjoy your weekend. Happy Veterans day :)
- Sharon Scarlett

ford auto ad

The spoof ad that I am writing about says "You wouldnt buy our shitty cars so we'll be taking your money anyway". This means that Americans have been buying foreign cars and not buying Ford, Chrysler or GM. Because of this these American auto industries need a bailout from the government which inturn forces the government to raise taxes so in the end American consumers are still paying for these companies. The consumer didnt buy the American car brands but as a punishment ends up paying for those companies anyways. These companies are just to big to fail. In the smaller paragraph of text its says that consumers bought foreign cars because of their supieror design, fuel milage and resale value. It also says that the consumer forgot that the biggest car maufacturers in America are to big to fail. These companies will always recieve bailouts and support from the government becuse they are part of the foundation of this economy and play a major role in economics. This ad is a pictue of a ford truck on a mountainside which mimics a traditional ford advertisement.

cosmo ad analyzation

The ad I am analyzing is for vera wang jewlry sold at zales diamond store. More specifically it is for a diamond engagement ring for the LOVE collection of vera wang jewlry.It is a picture of a man and a woman about to kiss and the woman is wearing an extravagent diamond ring on her ring finger. Her hand is laying over the mans shoulder in full view on the camara. The diamond is sparking and bright so it catches the eye and looks very beautiful and appealing. The models look to be in their mid twenties. Their faces are close together and they seem comfortable as though they have a deep intimate relationship. This ad is selling the ring and the special moment of proposing with the right ring that will wow your fiance and make the moment perfect. The audience for this ad is couples in their mid twenties that are ready to get married and need that perfect ring. More importantly it is for couples who are affluent and have enough money to afford a designer ring of this price. This ad promotes love and marriage because the couple seems happy and at peace with eachother. This ad invites the reader to imagine a proposal and wedding with the love of their life and the husband of their dreams.

creative story

Once upon a time there was a little boy about 8 years old who lived in Brazil. Him and his mother had been living in poverty in Brazil for their whole lives and were always unsatisfied. They craved a better live and a brighter future for the child. He was an amazing soccor player and had played with his friends ever since he learned how to walk. Of course since he lived in the poverty stricken part of Brazil he never had the right gear, sneakers or a proper field to play on. When his mother got divorced from her husband she realized enough was enough and she wanted to move to America. She told her son "pack your bags, were moving to the USA". He didnt know how to feel about this. Moving to a new country seemed intimidating and scary for a boy of his age. He would be leaving behind his entire family of aunts, uncles, grandparents and cousins. He would also be leaving behind all his friends who he grew up with and shared deep bonds. Lastly he relized he would be leaving behind his culture, his language and his traditions. He didnt want to dwell on the negatives but it was hard not to be upset about the changes to come.
Once they arived in America they went to their new apartment in Miami that his mother had put a year lease on. It wasnt in a nice area but it was cheap enough that his mother could pay rent for a few months with her savings from Brazil. He enrolled in school and started in the third grade. It was hard to transition into an American school because the teacher spoke english and they were teaching different sections then he had learned in Brazil. Luckily the boy was friendly so he made friends with the other Brazilians at school and created his clique.
His mother had a hard time finding decent work in Miami because she was uneducated and had been a houswife her whole life. No one wanted to hire her because of her lack of experience and because she couldnt speak english. Luckily she found a job cleaning dirty hotel rooms once the guests checked out. Also she had to get paid under the table because she didnt have her papers yet. She applied for citizenship but we all know that the government has so many applications that it takes about 10 to 15 years for it to be awarded. This was a hard for the mother because she desperately wanted to move out of her crappy ghetto apartment and start living the life she dreamed of. She started to wonder was it even worth it to come here? Working like a slave and making just enough to get by. Then she realized that she did it for her son. She realized she had to stop being so selfish and start caring for her pide and joy in life.
Her son joined the soccor team at school and became even better than he was in Brazil. He was so talented he went on to play in highschool and then in college at FIU. While playing in college he got scouted and went pro. He finally found something he loved about America and that is the oportunities its holds for everyone no matter how poor, uneducated, smart, talented or different the person may be. He made a ton of money in his career and bought a giant mansion on south beach for himself and one next door for his mother. She cried tears of joy when she saw it because she finally knew she made the right decison coming to this country. They lived like royalty for the rest of their lives and enjoyed all the finer things in life. But always keeping humble and never forgettting their past and what it took to make it big in this world. The end.


Once upon a time there was a young boy about 8 years old who lived in Brazil. Him and his mother had been living in poverty their entire lives and were always unsatisfied. His mother craved a better live and a brighter future for her son. He was an amazing soccor player and had played with his friends ever since he learned how to walk. Of course since he lived in the poverty stricken part of Brazil he never had the right gear, sneakers or a proper field to play on. When his mother got divorced from her husband she realized enough was enough and she wanted to move to America. She told her son "pack your bags, were moving to the USA". He didnt know how to feel about this. Moving to a new country seemed intimidating and scary for a boy his age. He would be leaving behind his entire family of aunts, uncles, grandparents and cousins. He would also be leaving behind all his friends who he grew up with and shared deeply rooted bonds with. Lastly he relized he would be leaving behind his culture, his language and his traditions. He didnt want to dwell on the negatives but it was hard not to be upset about the changes to come.
Once they arived in America they went to their new apartment in Miami that his mother had put a year lease on. It wasnt in a nice area but it was cheap enough that his mother could pay rent for a few months with her savings from Brazil. He enrolled in school and started in the third grade. It was hard to transition into an American school because the teacher spoke english instead of Portuguese and they were teaching different sections then he had learned in Brazil. Luckily the boy was friendly so he made friends with the other Brazilians at school and created his clique.
His mother had a hard time finding decent work in Miami because she was uneducated and had been a housewife her whole life. No one wanted to hire her because of her lack of experience and because she couldnt speak english. Luckily she found a job cleaning dirty hotel rooms once the guests checked out. Also she had to get paid under the table because she didnt have her papers yet. She applied for citizenship but we all know that the government has so many applications that it takes about 10 to 15 years for it to be awarded. This was a hard for the mother because she desperately wanted to move out of her crappy ghetto apartment and start living the life she dreamed of. She started to wonder was it even worth it to come here? Working like a slave and making just enough to get by. Then she realized that she did it for her son. She realized she had to stop being so selfish and start caring for the only person who mattered to her.
Her son joined the soccor team at school and became even better than he was in Brazil. He was so talented he went on to play in highschool and then in college at FIU. While playing in college he got scouted and went pro. He finally found something he loved about America and it is the oportunities its holds for everyone no matter how poor, uneducated, smart, talented or different the person may be. He made a ton of money in his career and bought a giant mansion on South Beach for himself and one next door for his mother. She cried tears of joy when she saw it because she finally knew she made the right decison coming to this country. They lived like royalty for the rest of their lives and enjoyed all the finer things in life. But they always keept humble and never forgot their past and what it took to make it in this world. The end.

peer review for second essay

My peer review went well and was informative. For this peer review essay I added more analysis to my paragraphs and developed my points with more information. I chose to extend my current paragraphs and I am still deciding whether to add a whole new one or not. My reader said the analysis section of my paragraphs was detailed but I need to work on my conlusion and intro. For my intro I will most likely talk about Seventeen magazines main advertising techniques and audience. In the conclusion I will relate all my main points back to the common theme that Seventeen magazine ties text and visuals together to create the ultimate advertising scheme. I asked my reader if my essay was organized? She asked me how can I develop my intro and conclusion and how can I include more about 17 magazine as a whole? Over the next few days my essay will come full circle with all examples and paragraphs.

analysis of second essay

My second essay is an analysis of Seventeen magazine and how the images relate to the text provided. I wrote about the fashion, beauty, accessory and health section of the magazine so far. I have chosen specific pages that are interesting to me and analyzed them to discover different advertising techniques and ideas. So far my paper is at a good length but to get it to the required length I can either extend my paragraphs with more analysis or add new paragraphs. I will most likely add one more paragraph and then go back and analyze my begining paragraphs. I recieved feedback on how I should go into more depth with the body types in the magazine. Also I need to add more arguement about the main point of the magazine. I will add an overall theme of the magazine and analyze that as well. I will answer the question of so what? and tie the essay all in together.

paper 2

For my second paper I am analyzing Seventeen Magazine. I am comparing the picutres from the magazine with the articles next to them and the advertisements placed near them. I am focusing on how the words work with the visuals to get teenage girls to buy the clothes featured in the pictures. Strategically placed next to the pictures are discounts for stores that offer the same clothes. This is done so that the stores make money and teens can be fashionable. One of my questions was how can I include more text in my comparisons. I can do this by including more quotes and and pasting pictures of advertisements with text in them.

awkward family photo

 

In this photograph there is a grandfather, grandmother and two grandchildren. They are standing outside in a backyard all dressed up for the family photo. The disturbing part about this photo is that the two children are holding guns. The grandson is in a tie and button down shirt but is holding a semiautomatic gun in his hands. The granddaughter is in a dress with a bow in her hair but she is holding a small handgun, Also the grandparents are smiling behind them like nothing is wrong! My attention is immediately drawn to the guns in the childrens hands. First of all this is extremely dangerous to let children handle weapons. The parents who are probably taking this picture are extremely bad parents and lack basic parenting skills. I immediately question their judgements as adults. Then I start to think maybe this photo is staged to get publicity and attention. It is hard to imagine something like this really happenening. But then again we are growing up in  a generation of people with messed up morals and no common sense.These might be some hilbillies out in the backwoods that let their children handle guns for hunting purposes though. But either way that is a private business and I dont think their should be public photos of their children with guns on the internet. My mother and brother both own guns so my position on gun ownership is you should be allowed to have them if you handle them correctly and safely. This does not look safe whatsoever.

my kitten

My kitten :)

Intros and conclusions

The strategies I am using to draw people into my paper are stating a paraphrase of a commonly held view. I start by saying how Digital Media has influenced a large portion of people and everyone has their own experiences with it. Then I dive into how digital media has influenced me personally and how it made me more educated and well rounded.  In my conclusion I wrap up my paper by summarizing my main point and listing a final explanation about how media changed me. I wrote how media taught me to be a friendly, tough, powerful, outgoing, ambitious woman. Also how media prompted me to take the next step in my life by bettering myself with an eduaction at college. The question of "so what?" is answered because now the reader can conclude why I act certain ways now and the reader can better understand my personality. This essay provides a lot of personal insight into my true character and emotions.

peer review

What I learned from this peer review is that my paper is alot better now that I edited it. The intro is solid and most of my expamples are clear except for one. All I have to do is add to my first paragraph how pokemon taught me any specific lessons. Also in my conclusion I am going to put in a few examples of how specifically the programs shaped me as an individual just to wrap it up and connect everything. I am happy with how the peer review went and It helped reinforce that I edited my paper correctly the first time. I am not going to change any of the television shows I used in my essay but I will add more exaples to a few of them. I am pleased with how my essay is organized because each show goes in chronilogial order as I grew up.

changes to paper

A part of my paper that I know I will change is my paragraph about Spongebob. As a kid it was one of my favorite shows and it meant a lot to me. Since I have to write about how it changed my view of the world I will say that it taught me that with friends you can accomplish anything. That teamwork can solve most problems effectively in the end. Spongebob used his friends Patrick and Squidward to solve problems around their town. He always had a positive attitude and never criticized anyone. He was happy and upbeat with great energy. He never let anyone bring him down or make him upset. This taught me to always stay positive and not to care what others think of me. That the world will always judge you and try to bring you down but if you don't let that happen you can succeed and live a positive life. For example when Squidward calls Spongebob obnoxious he just laughs it off and continues on with his day. I also learned that in a tight knit community everyone knows their place.

peer review on first draft

My workshop went well and I received plenty of vaulable information. First of all my draft is the first two paragraphs of my essay. My peers helped me plan out the rest of my essay. Im doing a timeline of my favorite tv shows growing up. I started with pokemon and spongebob. I planned out the rest of the shows I want to write about to be powerpuff girls, jersey shore, walking dead, and keeping up with the kardashians. They also helped me determine that the focus of my essay is how these shows connected me and my family. How we all used to watch tv together in one room. These shows gave us something to do together and created a common interest between us. I plan on showing how my family used to connect through tv to how now we all watch our seperate shows in different rooms. How now all our tastes in shows have changed and we are all interested in watching different things. I think this chage is kind of sad because weve lost something that we all used to enjoy doing together. But I realize that its a part of life and we all have to grow up and develop our own interests.

John Wayne a love song

The other day me and my boyfriend were watching a movie called "criminal" this movie was about a man who was being robbed in the middle of the night by an intruder in his house. He chased the inturder out of his house and then hit him in the head with a baseball bat and killed him. Then he went to jail for murder. While in the jail he was beaten by guards and the guards would set up fights between inmates. They would have to fight to the death or be shot at by the guards. Then after this happened the guards would erase the tapes. This made me realize that there are MANY corrupt guards and police officials in this world. There are people who seem to be morally correct but they are not. Trust no one and always strive to find the truth.

Day one, the shitty first drafts post

This reading made me think about what it takes to write good literature and stories. Being that I am an Engineering major I have never taken any interest or enjoyed writing. My brain has always been more geared toward math and science. I have always excelled in math and science classes and barely screaped by with a C in my english courses. While I thought all my writing was shitty now I see that only my first drafts were shitty. I dont think I ever cared enough to even make a second draft. Now I see that I must always make a second and third draft and I must keep revising forever. Maybe I should stop giving excuses about how im bad at writing and I should realize that no one is really "good" at it. The only reason their writing is better than mine is because they put more effort and time into it. Like all things in life im realizing that in order to be good at anything it takes hard work and dedication. And the sooner that everyone learns that the better off they will be for the rest of their lives. Thank you Anne Lamott for giving me the confidence to take on writing as a learning experience rather than a torture technique.


To be honest my writing style is very childish. I do not use many advance words or add a lot of creativity. As I mentioned in the paragraph above writing is not my forte. When I am assigned a writing task I usually try to get it done as soon as possible so I can get the experience over with and not have it haunting my daily schedule. I am a very busy person with a full time rigorous school schedule and a part time job with a boyfriend and an apartment to take care of. I simply do not have the time to sit down and get in dept with writing. I have no problem however writing in this class inorder to get a good grade and better my writing skillls. Maybe I just need some kind of fabulous event to change my perspective on writing and get me to enjoy it more. Either way I guess I must learn how to write effectively and efficiently to become a well rounded person and get ahead in life. No one wants to hire someone who is good at math and science but cant write an essay to save their life.


My writing is a caterpiller. It starts out small and ugly but after many days of work and transformation it turns into something beautiful. I know I have the potential to become a good writer, but there is a lot of work that comes with it. After all the revisions and edits I would like to believe that my writing is even enjoyable to others. I know my writing transforms because it is easy to go through the necessary steps to get it to that point. The sloppy first draft that just pours out. The careful second draft that I have my friends and family read and critique. And the perfect third draft complete with spell check and all.