peer review for second essay

My peer review went well and was informative. For this peer review essay I added more analysis to my paragraphs and developed my points with more information. I chose to extend my current paragraphs and I am still deciding whether to add a whole new one or not. My reader said the analysis section of my paragraphs was detailed but I need to work on my conlusion and intro. For my intro I will most likely talk about Seventeen magazines main advertising techniques and audience. In the conclusion I will relate all my main points back to the common theme that Seventeen magazine ties text and visuals together to create the ultimate advertising scheme. I asked my reader if my essay was organized? She asked me how can I develop my intro and conclusion and how can I include more about 17 magazine as a whole? Over the next few days my essay will come full circle with all examples and paragraphs.