awkward family photo

 

In this photograph there is a grandfather, grandmother and two grandchildren. They are standing outside in a backyard all dressed up for the family photo. The disturbing part about this photo is that the two children are holding guns. The grandson is in a tie and button down shirt but is holding a semiautomatic gun in his hands. The granddaughter is in a dress with a bow in her hair but she is holding a small handgun, Also the grandparents are smiling behind them like nothing is wrong! My attention is immediately drawn to the guns in the childrens hands. First of all this is extremely dangerous to let children handle weapons. The parents who are probably taking this picture are extremely bad parents and lack basic parenting skills. I immediately question their judgements as adults. Then I start to think maybe this photo is staged to get publicity and attention. It is hard to imagine something like this really happenening. But then again we are growing up in  a generation of people with messed up morals and no common sense.These might be some hilbillies out in the backwoods that let their children handle guns for hunting purposes though. But either way that is a private business and I dont think their should be public photos of their children with guns on the internet. My mother and brother both own guns so my position on gun ownership is you should be allowed to have them if you handle them correctly and safely. This does not look safe whatsoever.

my kitten

My kitten :)

Intros and conclusions

The strategies I am using to draw people into my paper are stating a paraphrase of a commonly held view. I start by saying how Digital Media has influenced a large portion of people and everyone has their own experiences with it. Then I dive into how digital media has influenced me personally and how it made me more educated and well rounded.  In my conclusion I wrap up my paper by summarizing my main point and listing a final explanation about how media changed me. I wrote how media taught me to be a friendly, tough, powerful, outgoing, ambitious woman. Also how media prompted me to take the next step in my life by bettering myself with an eduaction at college. The question of "so what?" is answered because now the reader can conclude why I act certain ways now and the reader can better understand my personality. This essay provides a lot of personal insight into my true character and emotions.

peer review

What I learned from this peer review is that my paper is alot better now that I edited it. The intro is solid and most of my expamples are clear except for one. All I have to do is add to my first paragraph how pokemon taught me any specific lessons. Also in my conclusion I am going to put in a few examples of how specifically the programs shaped me as an individual just to wrap it up and connect everything. I am happy with how the peer review went and It helped reinforce that I edited my paper correctly the first time. I am not going to change any of the television shows I used in my essay but I will add more exaples to a few of them. I am pleased with how my essay is organized because each show goes in chronilogial order as I grew up.

changes to paper

A part of my paper that I know I will change is my paragraph about Spongebob. As a kid it was one of my favorite shows and it meant a lot to me. Since I have to write about how it changed my view of the world I will say that it taught me that with friends you can accomplish anything. That teamwork can solve most problems effectively in the end. Spongebob used his friends Patrick and Squidward to solve problems around their town. He always had a positive attitude and never criticized anyone. He was happy and upbeat with great energy. He never let anyone bring him down or make him upset. This taught me to always stay positive and not to care what others think of me. That the world will always judge you and try to bring you down but if you don't let that happen you can succeed and live a positive life. For example when Squidward calls Spongebob obnoxious he just laughs it off and continues on with his day. I also learned that in a tight knit community everyone knows their place.

peer review on first draft

My workshop went well and I received plenty of vaulable information. First of all my draft is the first two paragraphs of my essay. My peers helped me plan out the rest of my essay. Im doing a timeline of my favorite tv shows growing up. I started with pokemon and spongebob. I planned out the rest of the shows I want to write about to be powerpuff girls, jersey shore, walking dead, and keeping up with the kardashians. They also helped me determine that the focus of my essay is how these shows connected me and my family. How we all used to watch tv together in one room. These shows gave us something to do together and created a common interest between us. I plan on showing how my family used to connect through tv to how now we all watch our seperate shows in different rooms. How now all our tastes in shows have changed and we are all interested in watching different things. I think this chage is kind of sad because weve lost something that we all used to enjoy doing together. But I realize that its a part of life and we all have to grow up and develop our own interests.