To start off this wonderful Friday afternoon on November 9th the class saw our last ad pitch for our paper ideas. That completed the ad pitchs for the week so everyone had their correct and final ideas for their paper. Next we transitioned into our peer reviews. We were asked to step into Ms. Lang's shoes for this peer review. We were instructed to respond from our point of view as a reader and to write a quick note at the end on what we liked about the paper, what we wanted to change about the paper and any grey areas. Once we had our partner we read eachothers papers and underlined what we liked or thought was confusing. We wrote our general notes on the back and disscussed how the paper flowed.
After a thorough disscussion with our partner we hopped on our blog to write about our peer review. We were instructed to write about which peer review technique was the most helpful to us? Examples being our ad pitch, peer review, rough draft or meeting with Ms. Lang. We also had to write about our paper and how we are going to continue drafting it to get it to its final form. Then sign up sheet was passed around with dates to meet one-on-one with Ms. Lang next week. The options are Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday or Friday. I suggest asking her for the sign up sheet on Wednesday when we meet again so you can get that extra help with your paper. It never hurts to directly speak with the source that is determining your grade on an assignment.
So after we finished and published our blog class was over and we were dismissed. An overall easy day and not something that we are not used to because this is in fact our third paper. Also we had to turn in a copy of our draft to Ms. Lang so if you skipped class today to get started early on your 3 day weekend remember to turn in a printed draft on Wednesday. Lastly our homework is to read "Just Walk On By" page 192-195 in our On Writing textbook. This homework is due Wednesday so be prepared to discuss this reading in class.
Thank you all for reading and enjoy your weekend. Happy Veterans day :)
- Sharon Scarlett
Friday, November 9, 2012
Friday, November 2, 2012
ford auto ad
The spoof ad that I am writing about says "You wouldnt buy our shitty cars so we'll be taking your money anyway". This means that Americans have been buying foreign cars and not buying Ford, Chrysler or GM. Because of this these American auto industries need a bailout from the government which inturn forces the government to raise taxes so in the end American consumers are still paying for these companies. The consumer didnt buy the American car brands but as a punishment ends up paying for those companies anyways. These companies are just to big to fail. In the smaller paragraph of text its says that consumers bought foreign cars because of their supieror design, fuel milage and resale value. It also says that the consumer forgot that the biggest car maufacturers in America are to big to fail. These companies will always recieve bailouts and support from the government becuse they are part of the foundation of this economy and play a major role in economics. This ad is a pictue of a ford truck on a mountainside which mimics a traditional ford advertisement.
Wednesday, October 31, 2012
cosmo ad analyzation
The ad I am analyzing is for vera wang jewlry sold at zales diamond store. More specifically it is for a diamond engagement ring for the LOVE collection of vera wang jewlry.It is a picture of a man and a woman about to kiss and the woman is wearing an extravagent diamond ring on her ring finger. Her hand is laying over the mans shoulder in full view on the camara. The diamond is sparking and bright so it catches the eye and looks very beautiful and appealing. The models look to be in their mid twenties. Their faces are close together and they seem comfortable as though they have a deep intimate relationship. This ad is selling the ring and the special moment of proposing with the right ring that will wow your fiance and make the moment perfect. The audience for this ad is couples in their mid twenties that are ready to get married and need that perfect ring. More importantly it is for couples who are affluent and have enough money to afford a designer ring of this price. This ad promotes love and marriage because the couple seems happy and at peace with eachother. This ad invites the reader to imagine a proposal and wedding with the love of their life and the husband of their dreams.
Monday, October 29, 2012
creative story
Once upon a time there was a little boy about 8 years old who lived in Brazil. Him and his mother had been living in poverty in Brazil for their whole lives and were always unsatisfied. They craved a better live and a brighter future for the child. He was an amazing soccor player and had played with his friends ever since he learned how to walk. Of course since he lived in the poverty stricken part of Brazil he never had the right gear, sneakers or a proper field to play on. When his mother got divorced from her husband she realized enough was enough and she wanted to move to America. She told her son "pack your bags, were moving to the USA". He didnt know how to feel about this. Moving to a new country seemed intimidating and scary for a boy of his age. He would be leaving behind his entire family of aunts, uncles, grandparents and cousins. He would also be leaving behind all his friends who he grew up with and shared deep bonds. Lastly he relized he would be leaving behind his culture, his language and his traditions. He didnt want to dwell on the negatives but it was hard not to be upset about the changes to come.
Once they arived in America they went to their new apartment in Miami that his mother had put a year lease on. It wasnt in a nice area but it was cheap enough that his mother could pay rent for a few months with her savings from Brazil. He enrolled in school and started in the third grade. It was hard to transition into an American school because the teacher spoke english and they were teaching different sections then he had learned in Brazil. Luckily the boy was friendly so he made friends with the other Brazilians at school and created his clique.
His mother had a hard time finding decent work in Miami because she was uneducated and had been a houswife her whole life. No one wanted to hire her because of her lack of experience and because she couldnt speak english. Luckily she found a job cleaning dirty hotel rooms once the guests checked out. Also she had to get paid under the table because she didnt have her papers yet. She applied for citizenship but we all know that the government has so many applications that it takes about 10 to 15 years for it to be awarded. This was a hard for the mother because she desperately wanted to move out of her crappy ghetto apartment and start living the life she dreamed of. She started to wonder was it even worth it to come here? Working like a slave and making just enough to get by. Then she realized that she did it for her son. She realized she had to stop being so selfish and start caring for her pide and joy in life.
Her son joined the soccor team at school and became even better than he was in Brazil. He was so talented he went on to play in highschool and then in college at FIU. While playing in college he got scouted and went pro. He finally found something he loved about America and that is the oportunities its holds for everyone no matter how poor, uneducated, smart, talented or different the person may be. He made a ton of money in his career and bought a giant mansion on south beach for himself and one next door for his mother. She cried tears of joy when she saw it because she finally knew she made the right decison coming to this country. They lived like royalty for the rest of their lives and enjoyed all the finer things in life. But always keeping humble and never forgettting their past and what it took to make it big in this world. The end.
Once upon a time there was a young boy about 8 years old who lived in Brazil. Him and his mother had been living in poverty their entire lives and were always unsatisfied. His mother craved a better live and a brighter future for her son. He was an amazing soccor player and had played with his friends ever since he learned how to walk. Of course since he lived in the poverty stricken part of Brazil he never had the right gear, sneakers or a proper field to play on. When his mother got divorced from her husband she realized enough was enough and she wanted to move to America. She told her son "pack your bags, were moving to the USA". He didnt know how to feel about this. Moving to a new country seemed intimidating and scary for a boy his age. He would be leaving behind his entire family of aunts, uncles, grandparents and cousins. He would also be leaving behind all his friends who he grew up with and shared deeply rooted bonds with. Lastly he relized he would be leaving behind his culture, his language and his traditions. He didnt want to dwell on the negatives but it was hard not to be upset about the changes to come.
Once they arived in America they went to their new apartment in Miami that his mother had put a year lease on. It wasnt in a nice area but it was cheap enough that his mother could pay rent for a few months with her savings from Brazil. He enrolled in school and started in the third grade. It was hard to transition into an American school because the teacher spoke english instead of Portuguese and they were teaching different sections then he had learned in Brazil. Luckily the boy was friendly so he made friends with the other Brazilians at school and created his clique.
His mother had a hard time finding decent work in Miami because she was uneducated and had been a housewife her whole life. No one wanted to hire her because of her lack of experience and because she couldnt speak english. Luckily she found a job cleaning dirty hotel rooms once the guests checked out. Also she had to get paid under the table because she didnt have her papers yet. She applied for citizenship but we all know that the government has so many applications that it takes about 10 to 15 years for it to be awarded. This was a hard for the mother because she desperately wanted to move out of her crappy ghetto apartment and start living the life she dreamed of. She started to wonder was it even worth it to come here? Working like a slave and making just enough to get by. Then she realized that she did it for her son. She realized she had to stop being so selfish and start caring for the only person who mattered to her.
Her son joined the soccor team at school and became even better than he was in Brazil. He was so talented he went on to play in highschool and then in college at FIU. While playing in college he got scouted and went pro. He finally found something he loved about America and it is the oportunities its holds for everyone no matter how poor, uneducated, smart, talented or different the person may be. He made a ton of money in his career and bought a giant mansion on South Beach for himself and one next door for his mother. She cried tears of joy when she saw it because she finally knew she made the right decison coming to this country. They lived like royalty for the rest of their lives and enjoyed all the finer things in life. But they always keept humble and never forgot their past and what it took to make it in this world. The end.
Once they arived in America they went to their new apartment in Miami that his mother had put a year lease on. It wasnt in a nice area but it was cheap enough that his mother could pay rent for a few months with her savings from Brazil. He enrolled in school and started in the third grade. It was hard to transition into an American school because the teacher spoke english and they were teaching different sections then he had learned in Brazil. Luckily the boy was friendly so he made friends with the other Brazilians at school and created his clique.
His mother had a hard time finding decent work in Miami because she was uneducated and had been a houswife her whole life. No one wanted to hire her because of her lack of experience and because she couldnt speak english. Luckily she found a job cleaning dirty hotel rooms once the guests checked out. Also she had to get paid under the table because she didnt have her papers yet. She applied for citizenship but we all know that the government has so many applications that it takes about 10 to 15 years for it to be awarded. This was a hard for the mother because she desperately wanted to move out of her crappy ghetto apartment and start living the life she dreamed of. She started to wonder was it even worth it to come here? Working like a slave and making just enough to get by. Then she realized that she did it for her son. She realized she had to stop being so selfish and start caring for her pide and joy in life.
Her son joined the soccor team at school and became even better than he was in Brazil. He was so talented he went on to play in highschool and then in college at FIU. While playing in college he got scouted and went pro. He finally found something he loved about America and that is the oportunities its holds for everyone no matter how poor, uneducated, smart, talented or different the person may be. He made a ton of money in his career and bought a giant mansion on south beach for himself and one next door for his mother. She cried tears of joy when she saw it because she finally knew she made the right decison coming to this country. They lived like royalty for the rest of their lives and enjoyed all the finer things in life. But always keeping humble and never forgettting their past and what it took to make it big in this world. The end.
Once upon a time there was a young boy about 8 years old who lived in Brazil. Him and his mother had been living in poverty their entire lives and were always unsatisfied. His mother craved a better live and a brighter future for her son. He was an amazing soccor player and had played with his friends ever since he learned how to walk. Of course since he lived in the poverty stricken part of Brazil he never had the right gear, sneakers or a proper field to play on. When his mother got divorced from her husband she realized enough was enough and she wanted to move to America. She told her son "pack your bags, were moving to the USA". He didnt know how to feel about this. Moving to a new country seemed intimidating and scary for a boy his age. He would be leaving behind his entire family of aunts, uncles, grandparents and cousins. He would also be leaving behind all his friends who he grew up with and shared deeply rooted bonds with. Lastly he relized he would be leaving behind his culture, his language and his traditions. He didnt want to dwell on the negatives but it was hard not to be upset about the changes to come.
Once they arived in America they went to their new apartment in Miami that his mother had put a year lease on. It wasnt in a nice area but it was cheap enough that his mother could pay rent for a few months with her savings from Brazil. He enrolled in school and started in the third grade. It was hard to transition into an American school because the teacher spoke english instead of Portuguese and they were teaching different sections then he had learned in Brazil. Luckily the boy was friendly so he made friends with the other Brazilians at school and created his clique.
His mother had a hard time finding decent work in Miami because she was uneducated and had been a housewife her whole life. No one wanted to hire her because of her lack of experience and because she couldnt speak english. Luckily she found a job cleaning dirty hotel rooms once the guests checked out. Also she had to get paid under the table because she didnt have her papers yet. She applied for citizenship but we all know that the government has so many applications that it takes about 10 to 15 years for it to be awarded. This was a hard for the mother because she desperately wanted to move out of her crappy ghetto apartment and start living the life she dreamed of. She started to wonder was it even worth it to come here? Working like a slave and making just enough to get by. Then she realized that she did it for her son. She realized she had to stop being so selfish and start caring for the only person who mattered to her.
Her son joined the soccor team at school and became even better than he was in Brazil. He was so talented he went on to play in highschool and then in college at FIU. While playing in college he got scouted and went pro. He finally found something he loved about America and it is the oportunities its holds for everyone no matter how poor, uneducated, smart, talented or different the person may be. He made a ton of money in his career and bought a giant mansion on South Beach for himself and one next door for his mother. She cried tears of joy when she saw it because she finally knew she made the right decison coming to this country. They lived like royalty for the rest of their lives and enjoyed all the finer things in life. But they always keept humble and never forgot their past and what it took to make it in this world. The end.
Friday, October 19, 2012
peer review for second essay
My peer review went well and was informative. For this peer review essay I added more analysis to my paragraphs and developed my points with more information. I chose to extend my current paragraphs and I am still deciding whether to add a whole new one or not. My reader said the analysis section of my paragraphs was detailed but I need to work on my conlusion and intro. For my intro I will most likely talk about Seventeen magazines main advertising techniques and audience. In the conclusion I will relate all my main points back to the common theme that Seventeen magazine ties text and visuals together to create the ultimate advertising scheme. I asked my reader if my essay was organized? She asked me how can I develop my intro and conclusion and how can I include more about 17 magazine as a whole? Over the next few days my essay will come full circle with all examples and paragraphs.
Wednesday, October 17, 2012
analysis of second essay
My second essay is an analysis of Seventeen magazine and how the images relate to the text provided. I wrote about the fashion, beauty, accessory and health section of the magazine so far. I have chosen specific pages that are interesting to me and analyzed them to discover different advertising techniques and ideas. So far my paper is at a good length but to get it to the required length I can either extend my paragraphs with more analysis or add new paragraphs. I will most likely add one more paragraph and then go back and analyze my begining paragraphs. I recieved feedback on how I should go into more depth with the body types in the magazine. Also I need to add more arguement about the main point of the magazine. I will add an overall theme of the magazine and analyze that as well. I will answer the question of so what? and tie the essay all in together.
Wednesday, October 3, 2012
paper 2
For my second paper I am analyzing Seventeen Magazine. I am comparing the picutres from the magazine with the articles next to them and the advertisements placed near them. I am focusing on how the words work with the visuals to get teenage girls to buy the clothes featured in the pictures. Strategically placed next to the pictures are discounts for stores that offer the same clothes. This is done so that the stores make money and teens can be fashionable. One of my questions was how can I include more text in my comparisons. I can do this by including more quotes and and pasting pictures of advertisements with text in them.
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